Author's Note: So I know that creating an author's note is optional, but I felt obligated to since I'm beginning the journey that the next few weeks will be taking us on. I enjoyed looking into ideas for where exactly in Alaska this would take place, and what kind of place it would be. I wanted to begin hinting at who Nat is, but not reveal too much. To me, my only job was to create the setting, and open up several ideas as to where the story could go. I feel like this is the best thing I've written this semester, and I hope some of you might agree with me. The cliffhanger ending of the chapter was, again, to leave room for you guys. I'm excited to sit back and see where everyone takes this "novel" of ours, and I can't wait to input again as the book draws to an end.
Chapter 1: Unsettling in Unalaska
The flight dove into the rolling gray, becoming engulfed in the
overcast. There was no way for any passenger to know where the plane was; it
was a wonder how the hell the pilots even knew what direction was right in the
midst of it all. The only indication of any type of direction was the falling
sensation that accompanied the descent; the downward slope of a roller-coaster
that had no track. Nat MacMurray had never been a fan of being up in the air,
nor was she now.
In the same
way she would stomach a ride, she closed her eyes. She would focus on what
would come afterwards. She would let everything that was happening wash over
her. Struggling through it would only make the experience worse. An
announcement from the captain came on the intercom:
“Ladies and gentlemen, as we start
our descent, please make sure your seat backs and tray tables are in their full
upright position. Make sure your seat belt is securely fastened—“ His voice was
raspy, like something had wrung out his throat in the same way you might wring
out a rag at the sink. It brought the focus right off of him and onto her
surroundings. She opened her eyes, discovering that the view outside of her
oval window had revealed itself.
The gray had begun to disperse, the color
dispersed into shades, and shades became shapes. There were mountains, more
than an abundance of them. Despite the fact that it was spring, the tips of the
mountains held on to the frosty remnants of winter. Further below, the
mountainside grew lush and green, something that Nat never really imagined of a
place she only knew through stereotypes. Eskimos, snow, igloos, etc. She felt
bad for holding on to such childish depictions, but she was glad to finally be somewhat
outside of the primary states in the country. Alaska might as well be its own
little country.
The airport was approaching quickly.
A single tower with a single runway. Nat could have taken a ride on one of the
many ships that enter Dutch Harbor, but she had to be there quickly. Leaving
flight as her only viable choice. She was beginning a new job, and to a greater
extent, a new life. The plane tapped the ground, landing smoothly. The captain
came back on the intercom:
“Ladies and gentlemen, welcome to
Dutch Harbor Airport. Local time is 4:17 p.m. and the temperature is fifty-one
degrees Fahrenheit. For your safety and
comfort, please remain seated with your seat belt fastened until—“ Nat didn't really care to listen. She was ready to go. She gathered her on-board items and
got off when she was allowed to.
On the way to the Dutch Harbor
Airport lobby, Nat turned her phone on to check for any important calls or
messages. The only things she found were several missed calls and voice-mails
from her mother. She chose not to reply; not right now, at least. She needed to
head into town and get settled. She grabbed her luggage, and proceeded to the
help desk to find out how she could get into town.
“Yes?” The lady was not the young,
photogenic person that all the big city airports seem to hire. This woman was
older, heavy-eyed, and had no makeup on whatsoever. Maybe I should've searched
for a taxi on my phone, Nat thought.
“What time does the next shuttle head
into town?” Nat asked.
“Shuttle? We don’t have shuttles.”
The help desk woman seemed to almost smirk at the stupidity of someone not from
the area.
“Okay, well, do you know of any local
taxis I could call and get a lift from?” Nat had her phone ready to go.
“Nope.” The woman replied. Nat decided
to search using her phone. As she typed in the search bar, the help desk lady
continued not helping with her remarks.
“I’m pretty sure we don’t have any
local taxi services. You don’t have anyone coming to pick you up?” The help desk
woman was perplexed. Nat was both baffled and frustrated.
“How am I supposed to get into town?”
She wasn't sure what to do or say. Fifteen minutes in Unalaska, Alaska and
already she was having trouble accomplishing something as trivial as traveling from
the airport to her hotel. On the tail-end of this ill-formed encounter was a
man, who approached Nat. His hair was receding, so much so that it naturally
spiked up of its own accord. His face was elongated, and thin. His cheekbones
looked like they could have poked through the skin at any moment. A thin, but
groomed goatee wrapped it all up. He had on a bright orange and blue fisherman
suit, with giant brown boots to accompany them.
“You say you need a ride into town?”
he asked. “I work down in the harbor, I’m heading back to town if you want a
ride.”
“Are you sure?” Nat wasn't sure why
she asked that. She didn't want to sit around and figure out another way to
leave the airport.
“Not a problem, at all. Name’s Barrie
Cozier.” Barrie extended his hand to her. It was grimy and clammy from the
day’s work. Nat didn't want to offend the man, so she shook the man’s hand. She tried to keep her grip minimal. He squeezed her hand, and she pulled away as
soon as she could.
“Are you leaving now?” She asked.
“Yeah, what do you say?” Nat didn't have any other choice. She accepted, tugging along her belongings.
Outside the airport, the walk to his
car was several minutes, closer to the fisheries that made up much of the
harbor. Initially it was a silent walk, which Nat didn't mind. She wasn't sure
if she had made the right choice in accepting a ride from someone as soon as
she touched down in Unalaska. Nat studied the harbor, scoping out the various
fishing boats that filled up the docks. Many of them were bright red and blue
in color, which was interesting. The dock was very quiet. There was hardly
anyone out by the docks.
“Where is everyone? Seems kind of
slow for a warmer day in the year. I thought that warmer weather would mean
more fishing?” Nat asked.
“Well, that’s changed in the last
decade or so. You ever watch the Discovery channel?” Barrie didn't even look
over at her, he just kept on going.
“Not really.” Nat wasn't much of a
television watcher. Barrie opened up a bit more.
“Neither am I, but that T.V. show, Deadliest Catch, that’s shot here.”
“Really?” Nat seemed to recall
reading that somewhere when she was looking into the area online.
“Yep, and you’d think that they’d
prefer to shoot during the warmer times of the year, which is when we used to
be busier. Nope, they wanted to film during the coldest times of the year; capture
the struggles we go through in fucking freezing ice water. It made for a ‘more
interesting show’ apparently.” Barrie’s voice was less monotonous now, like
they had stumbled across something he was really interested in. Nat also
thought that it was possible that the man simply wanted someone to vent to
about his job. He continued on,
“Once the show became popular, business
picked up during colder weather, eventually becoming busier than the warmer
times. So now we hardly work in the weather that is somewhat bearable, and
constantly in the weather that’s so fucking cold, it makes you wish it were
hell on the earth.” Barrie was full-blown ranting now.
“I’m sure the extra income is nice,
though.” Nat wanted to drive the conversation away from a rant.
“Only if you’re a featured fisherman.
The rest of us don’t receive shit.” Her attempt failed, he continued on.
“As if I already didn't find
television that interesting. Now every time I see someone watching that show, I
want to throw the television into the harbor.” A gray compact car, presumably
his, drew closer in sight. As happy as she was to see the car, Nat was now kind
of interested in what Barrie the fisherman was talking about, for specific
reasons.
“Does everyone feel that way? The
guys like you, who are not featured.” Better to know who not to approach
regarding her potential work, she thought.
“For the most part. There’s this one
guy who is actually interested in it, mainly because he likes the whole camera
aspect. He went on about wanting to work on those shows where you just watch
animals, y’know, living their lives while some British prick narrates what
they’re doing. What are those called?”
“Nature documentaries?” Nat actually
liked nature docs. Good to know that there’s someone else out here that also
does, she thought.
“Yeah. He said something about
wanting to be one of those guys, just camping out in the wild, waiting for the
right moment to capture animals being raw and brutal. What if nothing happens?
Then you’re just camping. What if something bad happens? Do they have
protection from really big animals; predators and shit? This is my car.” Barrie
pointed to the little compact car, the only car in any direction. Thanks
captain obvious, Nat thought. She begun to like this guy, though. He was
interesting.
Barrie opened the passenger door of his car, which was cluttered.
There were receipts, a suitcase, and lots of fishing gear.
“Sorry, give me a moment.” He grabbed
much of the trash and threw it in the back of the car. He began tossing the
gear in the back as well. He pulled what appeared to be fisherman overalls out
from under the suitcase. As he did this, the suitcase fell out of the seat,
crashing to the ground.
“Shit.” He muttered.
“Here, let me help.” Nat reached for
the suitcase, but she was unaware that the lock had busted. As she picked it
up, the suitcase dropped open, allowing its contents to fall all over the
ground. What she saw made her freeze. Barrie turned around, and he too paused.
“Oh shit.” He said. Nat didn't want
to look at the man, but she had to. He had already locked eyes in her
direction. He let out a deep sigh. Not of relief, but of being caught.
“Well, I guess you can see how desperate I've become.”
I like this it is very detailed and I already like the character of Nat and it will be ash for me to continue from here.
ReplyDeleteYeah this is really good. Well-written in the sense that It just keeps moving and reveals character efficiently and gives a good sense of this place through Barrie and the conundrum at the airport. It is a cool way to start this novel, with conflict already coming from all directions and a little still left to reveal which we will get in the next few chapters, I guess. I am excited to write one myself...if I picked up some mystery book at the store and this was the first chapter, I would probably buy it.
ReplyDeleteYou've certainly set up a sense of purposelessness or discomfort that will be interesting to develop as she finds home in Alaska. I guess we'll just have to integrate the backstory in San Diego as flashback? There will probably too much to explain (college, relationship with parents, etc) without a discrete scene.
ReplyDeleteI agree that this is the best thing you've written for class. You introduced (though not too obviously [which is a good thing]), the themes of the books (adjusting to Alaska, film, a man who's frustrated with his career). I'm interested to read where the cliff hanger takes us.
ReplyDeleteI do like the way you've already started to approach the transition in Nat's life. Good job
ReplyDeleteGood concrete details in the setting and characterization is moving nicely
ReplyDeleteGreat opening details in establishing out main character, location, and potential conflicts. There are already some very good narrative pressures at hand and I agree that this is your best work so far.
ReplyDeleteI really like that you picked a place called Unalaska because I enjoyed the humor in that. The details of setting when she was flying in were very nice as well. Great job setting up the story!
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